Book review given by others
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Before reading the article, Xiaoye first read the book review section of the author and saw the bitterness of many new authors. Everyone is from new to old, and Xiaoye is no exception. I just hope that the author can persevere and persevere.
Before commenting, if the author is based on the purpose of self-entertainment and non-online positioning and non-commercial positioning, then the author can completely ignore the comments below Xiaoye. In addition, I hope that the author can bear it. Xiaoye's comments below will be mixed, and even the same sentence will be positive and negative.
Preface:
I have commented on many books and found that many new authors have a common problem - to show off their writing and citations! In fact, I don't know if you know that these classics and beautiful writings are often skipped by most readers at a glance. But for the author, these are exactly what makes him want to describe. Here, Xiaoye has to say, "Children's shoes", do you have some of the following? First of all, it is emphasized that the works you are writing now are not formal literature, nor classical classics, let alone classics that have been handed down for generations. Of course, you may achieve the above-mentioned achievements in your works in the future, but what about now? It's a very simple sentence, just like parenting, learn to walk before running!
The authors themselves should obviously know the problem I mentioned. Only a few "sluts" who focus on traditional literature will care more about the beauty of the writing, and the vast majority of readers need to see the plot, including many authors. An irresistible work, readers don't even care that your sentences don't understand, and the typos are full, and at most they will only slander them - this author has a lot of typos. He hasn't graduated from primary school, and the sentences are not smooth, but they will still automatically correct your typos in their minds and correct your unsmooth sentences. , and then read the masterpiece with relish as always - this is online fast food literature. If the authors can't understand the truth, then please sharpen your sword for ten years to produce an amazing masterpiece that surpasses the Three Kingdoms and is comparable to the Red Mansions!
The reason why I wrote this foreword is that Xiaoye read the author's "Jingzangshi Zhongling" speech! Indeed, I deeply admire the author for 5 years of sharpening his sword. But I don't know the positioning of the online article is not here! Then I will give another example. If the author goes to Quanjude to eat roast duck, after entering the store, the service staff first served a cup of tea, 10 minutes later, another cup of tea, 20 minutes later, water storage, then a plate of peanuts, and then 20 minutes later, a plate of sauerkraut, and so on. Until 2 hours later, when the author When the waiter was about to serve the roast duck again, he brought a plate of melon seeds. What is the author's mood? I don't mean to be sarcastic about the author, but to make you understand that if you say the right thing when you are right, you can put the right food!
Cough, it's off topic, to get back to the point. Explain in advance that Xiaoye's commentary, while reading while commenting, only treating himself as a reader. When the "reader" can't stand it, Xiaoye will read a few more, but only a few.
I. Work creativity:
1, title of the book:
How to put it, today's online literature is almost uncreative. All kinds of works are emerging one after another. All kinds of themes and classic fans have almost been written badly and can't be worse, so creativity is already a little difficult, and so is this article. Moreover, the title of Tianjian Moyuan is basically destined to be the cup of this book! If the author is a hot god-level author, and under the popularity of the rainbow, this article may be like the nine tripods of tomatoes, breaking the current situation of martial arts works. But this is just a fantasy at present.
Nowadays, the title party is unimpeded because a good book title can first arouse the reader's desire to read. If the title of the book cannot make readers have the desire to click, then even if the content in you is as brilliant as a flower, few people will appreciate it! If the title of this article is changed to before 2004, it may have been exchanged for a large number of clicks, but now I don't agree. Therefore, the author must first think of a shining title that can attract the attention of the public when opening a new book. Because we are not great gods, without their popularity, it is impossible to click on a brief introduction of the title of the book, and the recommendation will come.
2. Introduction:
If the title of the book is like a woman's appearance, then Xiaoye will say that the introduction is like a woman's figure. When a man looks at a woman's appearance and looks at her figure, her appearance is already general, and her figure is mediocre. So basically, there are few people left to study whether this woman is ingenious, virtuous and virtuous.
The introduction of this article is very ordinary and popular. It can be said that there is no bright spot, and an unknown god "Jie" is used as an introduction. It's not brilliant. Isn't it a failure to use such a remote god to "*"? Although the main points of the introduction are highlighted, and the main lines of character events are all available, but they can't arouse people's desire to read, just like the emergence of ethereal and bad guys that attracts countless people's amazement, but the appearance of hundreds of unchanging ethereal and bad guys makes people taste like wax.
To be continued...
To be honest, Xiaoye barely read 5 chapters of this book, and it can be said to be a walk-by-eye. Why? So tired! Xiaoye will not comment on this article as usual. I just hope that Xiaoye's words can take advantage of the author's confusion.
Xiaoye, regardless of the author's writing style, regardless of the author's character portrayal attack, literary cultivation, regardless of the author's plot, only a few more words from the perspective of online literature.
First of all, let's talk about the positioning problem. If this article goes back a hundred years or from the perspective of traditional literature, it is not a masterpiece, but at least quite good. But it completely loses its meaning in the online literary world. First of all, the readers, or consumers, targeted by online articles, are those who come to relax for leisure and entertainment. And the author's article is quite tired at first glance - even more tired than the Red Mansion? What's the solution? - "Taiwen", first of all, read it, and Xiaoye saw the chapter title full of "seven-character unique sentence"! The head is bigger first.
Open the wedge, what is the meaning of "The Book of Songs • Zheng Feng • Zijin" quoted by the author? I don't understand, I don't understand, I don't understand! What is the use of this traction wedge for the whole article or a step back? The sentence has a source but it is not used up!
The meaning of wedge, although Xiaoye is very tired to watch? The main reason is that the words are too elegant! Always have to figure out the meaning between the author's words. This is the reason why many readers are unwilling to continue reading, because they come to read online articles to relax, not to use their brains, or to learn Chinese! Although the wedge understood it, it directly felt that this was a heroine's article. - And Xiaoye said a digression, and felt that it would be more suitable if this article was published on the female frequency. What Xiaoye said was true.
In the next first and second chapters, the author's foundation is not small, but the protagonist is really too deep and deep. It was not until the third chapter that he saw Nangong Xia appear. Of course, because he didn't watch much, he should be the protagonist. After all, the few pictures he watched later are mainly based on him. That's all I have to say about the article. Finally, I would like to forgive that some sentences may be repeated at the same time.
This article is a combination of history, classical immortals and aesthetics. From a literary point of view, although this article is not a classic, at least it is quite good, but "the wrong era". Moreover, the author's writing style is also quite popular, but some descriptions are not divided into primary and secondary, and the level is unclear. Take the description of the mansion in Changhe County in the first chapter as an example.
Example: Outside Changhe County, there is a big house. This big house is carved with beams and painted buildings. It is luxuriously decorated. The small bridge in the courtyard is flowing, the pool is clear, and the lotus leaf fields in the pool shows the beauty of the water town in the south of the Yangtze River. Except for these main courtyards, the rest of the places are deserted. Although they are not too dilapidated, they are also like red paint, and the leaves are full of fallen leaves. It is very strange to match with the main courtyard.
This paragraph is described in beautiful words and detailed. But it can't make people feel the strangeness said in the last sentence as soon as they read it. Just because the order is reversed in the description. If the surrounding dilapidated, deserted and fallen leaves are the first, and the description of the main courtyard is the first, it can highlight its strangeness.
has said too much, let's not talk about the author's plot! I pleaded guilty, I was wrong!——!!!
Then the system gives some suggestions to the author. Whether it is adopted or not depends on the author's self-study.
1, the world has become a cliché, and the arm is unstoppable. This move is absolutely not derogatory. I just want to say that many things are unchangeable by one person. Since literature or online literature has fallen into the cliché, the author has also chosen this platform. So since it can't be changed, it's only good to follow the local customs, but it's not advisable not to be able to innovate.
2. The title and introduction of the book are like a woman's appearance and figure. As mentioned earlier, so since the title party is indeed feasible, why can't we take the essence of the period? As long as the innovations of predecessors are right, will they just follow the trend in the same name? If you think so, it is not pedantic. As for the introduction, because Xiaoye doesn't know the whole plot arrangement of the author, he can't say much. I hope that the author will take out some of the highlights that should be taken out and not regard them as wine in the deep alley.
3. Online literature positions readers as a paradise for leisure people, so since readers come for leisure, they should relax their body and mind instead of reading a casual novel. They should also bite the meaning between sentences and words, and tire themselves to death. Therefore, easy-to-understand languages are still "necesirable" and rare words are "unfadevoidable". Try to citation scriptures as little as possible, because it is likely that these authors and the most important things for you and the plot are exactly what readers ignore and jump over.
4. The foreshadowing of online literature is not connected with traditional literature. It is very undesirable to see the protagonist's practice in Chapter 3, and digging such a big hole makes readers afraid as soon as they see it. How can we wait for the author to fill in the pit? Readers are different from our book reviewers. We are responsible for reading the first three chapters even if we can't read it any more, but readers don't understand. When they feel that they can't read it, even if the content behind you is as delicious as abalone and bird's nest, they have no chance to taste it.
To sum up, there is only one sentence - online literature is not too elegant, easy to understand is true.
This rating is not available, because it is very entangled. From the perspective of traditional literature, this article is rare, but from the perspective of online literature, it is difficult to achieve. Therefore, it will not be rated for the time being.
Note: The above comments only represent Xiaoye's personal opinion and do not represent the opinions of others.
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